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Feb. 3rd, 2005 | 03:00 pm
mood: busybusy
music: Kool Keith - My City Was Gone (Butcher Bros. Mix)

Sasona Coöperative
Live with your friends! Freak-friendly, fun yet serious, crazy yet saner than most modern living arrangements. Hang out in the common areas or stay in your room(s), according to your mood.

Sasona Coöperative is a non-student 17 member housing coöperative in the southern Zilker park neighborhood. We are a non-profit coöperative whose purpose is to provide affordable room and board to any interested persons in the community, and to empower those persons by encouraging direct participation.

Sasona Cooperative provides individual rooms in a spacious, democratically run, member-owned household. While each of the rooms is located within the house, each member of the house has an independent lease for residence, making this an appealing alternative to traditional apartment housing. Voluntary (but recommended) attendance meetings are held each Sunday evening to discuss issues/events of the membership's choosing.

Rent is based on room size. Rooms are currently available ranging from $410-$560 per month. Doubles are available at lower effective rates. Everyone is welcome, including families, children, and pets. (Dog owners note: The backyard is fenced.)

In addition to monthly rent, members of the house are required to participate in labor hours (it's only a “chore” if you're doing something you don't like!) each week. The members of the house organize tasks such as light cleaning and maintenance, administrative tasks, and cooking meals. A vegetarian meal is prepared and served each evening, and the restaurant-style kitchen is fully stocked at all times for the convenience of the members. Through participation in house meetings and taking initiative as needed, each member has a direct effect on how the house operates. It is very much a 'do-ocracy'. Monthly rent covers all utilities, laundry, house phone, ethernet/internet in all rooms, and use of common indoor and outdoor spaces.

The house is a sprawling one-story space located on an acre of tree-shaded land in the southern end of the Zilker Park neighborhood. The house features 17 private rooms, as well as 3 common living rooms, 4 porches, 3 and two half baths, and the aforementioned giant kitchen. The yard is almost entirely shaded by large live oak trees, other than the parking lot and gardens at the front of the property. There are storage sheds located in the rear of the property for the convenience of the members.

Associate memberships are also available if you would like to participate in meals and house facilities without living in the house.

House meetings are held each Sunday evening, so stop by and check us out. Ask anyone who lives here to give you a tour.

Contact Trip (trip at sasona dot org) for more information.

EDIT: Additions highlighted in yellow. Several deletions, not marked.
EDIT: Moved the paragrah that answers "how much $$" up nearer to the beginning.

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Triple Entendre

Re: taking you at your word

from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:37 pm (UTC)
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If only the moths paid rent! That would more than subsidize humans.

Empowerment is for hippies. Hippies make me twitch. And yet I am one. So empowerment stays.

And it IS ad copy, so yeah. It's only partly in my writing style.

Thank you!

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Eposia

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from: eposia
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 12:14 am (UTC)
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No kidding, awesome description of living space! Thank you for sharing, Trip!

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 12:18 am (UTC)
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A pleasure! And send us your friends! Mars needs women!

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Eposia

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from: eposia
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 12:25 am (UTC)
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That phrase keeps haunting me. (As in that's the third time in 24 hours I've heard it from separate sources) Trust me, I would so volunteer to be a Martian Woman.

Hell, if work was in S Austin I'D want to check it out!

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Tanjent

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from: tanjent
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 09:32 pm (UTC)
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"democratically running the house ... democratically run" is a little redundant

"Very much a 'do-ocracy'" isn't a sentence

"acre of grounds" -> "acre of land"

"3 and two half baths" -> "3 bathrooms, 2 half-baths"


"The yard is almost entirely...of the members" -> "Outside there are storage sheds available for all members, a large sunny garden, and tons of live oak trees that provide shade for the rest of the yard."

"located on an acre of tree shade land" - redundant

also, you might move the rent $ and all bills paid bit closer to the top.

that's mostly all nitpicky stuff though. the ad is plenty clear enough, even if the language is a little clunky. :)

-tanjent

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:40 pm (UTC)
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I think I got about half of these fixed, thanks! I'll come back for the rest later. I don't want to imply that we store our members in the sheds--Arsenic and Old Lace, perhaps? ;)

Thanks!

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Cherry Pie Girl

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from: comodulate
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 10:06 pm (UTC)
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The line that starts in addition has monthly misspelled.
line that starts vegitarian needs a space after the comma after evening.

Sounds great!

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:40 pm (UTC)
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Hopefully all fixed.

Thanks for reading it!

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Jenmarie

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from: jenmarie
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 10:30 pm (UTC)
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I'm too busy being all impressed with the fact that y'all are family/kid-friendly. I wanna live there! *wistful thinking*

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:46 pm (UTC)
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We are you-friendly! Come visit! =D

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Sara

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from: avice
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 08:59 am (UTC)
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This icon. This icon of yours fully epitomizes how the Dracula in Buffy the Vampire Slayer reminded me of you.

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Slackananda

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from: slackananda
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 10:57 pm (UTC)
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This is an informative post. The couple of times I've visited it seemed like an awesome place. I remember House of Commons with fondness, six or seven years ago. I am interested in Sasona but have no current housing needs. I would like to get to know you better and check out the grounds more, which I had no idea were so extensive. Would it be OK if sometime we brought over a tray of scratch-made lasagna with big chunks of tender Zucchini, fat slices of portabello mushroom, fresh tomatoes, three kinds of olives, three kinds of cheese and plenty of fresh basil? If it's not too much trouble.... :P

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:45 pm (UTC)
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Doggone it, and I'm hungry, too. Only if it's rice noodles, though, I'm otherwise allergic to pasta. ;D

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Slackananda

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from: slackananda
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 12:50 am (UTC)
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you are allergic to wheat? Are there other alternatives besides rice noodles?

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 01:31 am (UTC)
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I am mildly allergic to a bunch of things, many unknown. Wheat is one. Rice is okay. No other grains, no.

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Slackananda

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from: slackananda
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 01:39 am (UTC)
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I confess to an ignorance of pasta composition. I can work with rice, no problem! :P

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Ratha

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from: papertygre
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 03:43 am (UTC)
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You're allergic to wheat? Wow, that implies sasona's vegetarian fare is friendly to that. Is it vegan-friendly (i.e. dairy-optional) too?

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Triple Entendre

Sasonavitawheatavegemin

from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 10:36 am (UTC)
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Yes. And as much as I try to discourage them from trying to accomodate my arbitrary diet, my fellow housemate cooks are very sweet to me and often make substitutions in recipes, such as omitting "flour" in soups and using wheat-free tamari sauce. "I think this one is 'Trip-friendly'!", they'll proudly announce.

Our menu planner is vegan, so there's usually a vegan option.

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Ratha

Re: Sasonavitawheatavegemin

from: papertygre
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 11:46 pm (UTC)
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excellent.

I'ma have to come by when I get down there in a couple of months.

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Triple Entendre

Re: Sasonavitawheatavegemin

from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 11th, 2005 01:16 am (UTC)
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please do! 'twould be fun to meet you.

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Ratha

Re: Sasonavitawheatavegemin

from: papertygre
date: Feb. 11th, 2005 01:26 am (UTC)
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Likewise :)

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Slackananda

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from: slackananda
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:00 pm (UTC)
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I just grokked that you wanted editing help. I will print it out and write with red ink if you want, then send you the scan.... Seriously. I'm the writingcritic founder, after all!

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:15 pm (UTC)
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Only if it would amuse you. I didn't so much write this as mash it together from three sources and try but fail to remove the redundancies.

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Slackananda

slack offering

from: slackananda
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 12:21 am (UTC)
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My printer's disconnected at the moment so I thought I'd just work electronically. I ended up spontaneously applying my own rewrite process. Here's three paragraphs. Hope I'm not being too presumptuous.... :P

Sasona Coöperative
Friendly living with friends! We offer a comfortable home and community environment for unusual, responsible people. Company and conversation can be found in our common living rooms, front porch or yard, while private rooms offer instant hermitage as needed for creative, moody, studious folks.

Sasona Coöperative is a 17 member housing coöperative in the southern Zilker park neighborhood of Austin, Texas. We are a non-profit housing coöperative offering affordable room and board to anyone interested in participating in the community. Members may be students in a formal or informal sense, but student status is not required for membership. We seek to build community and empower people by encouraging direct participation in all aspects of managing and maintaining our home.

Sasona Cooperative provides individual rooms in a spacious, democratically run, member-owned household. Each member of the house has an independent lease for residence making this an appealing alternative to traditional apartment housing. Each Sunday evening we meet to discuss topics of interest, which may be proposed by any member. Attendance is voluntarily, but encouraged.

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the Edward

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from: thedward
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:07 pm (UTC)
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I'm pleased that you spelled 'coöperative' correctly (with diaeresis, that is :)

Also. Sasona Rocks! Woo!

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Triple Entendre

I can't take full credit

from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:17 pm (UTC)
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That's your fault--I copied and pasted it from your LJ!

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inanimate carbon rod

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from: cobaltviolet
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 03:44 am (UTC)
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'coöperative' is so annoying.

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Triple Entendre

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from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 11th, 2005 01:17 am (UTC)
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Yeah, but so is most of the English language.

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The (Extra)ordinary Anthropologist

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from: jenarael
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:25 pm (UTC)
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This would be so cool, as long as you didn't elect yourself Grand High Overlord of the cooperative and bossed us all ar--

--ok. Living community, not clubhouse. What a cool idea though, Trip. ;D

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Triple Entendre

How did you know?

from: triple_entendre
date: Feb. 3rd, 2005 11:44 pm (UTC)
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Actually, I'm the chairman of the board, which means I sound important but don't work anywhere near as hard as the "director".

I can't take credit for the idea, but this really is where I live, and we have a few rooms available, hence this ad!

Thanks! ;)

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from: marconiplein
date: Feb. 4th, 2005 09:28 pm (UTC)
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did you mean "dude-ocracy"?

i loves me some sasona. word of truth. but it's a dude-ocracy.

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